Monteverdi Posted July 3, 2011 Report Share Posted July 3, 2011 "Shaking my head like a dog...I stepped out of bed and walked towards my traveling pack that lay in the corner of the room. "There was nothing that could erase that image from her head..." This appears to transition suddenly from first person to third, and "her head" confuses things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted July 3, 2011 Report Share Posted July 3, 2011 Monteverdi; Excellent, thanks- we'll review this in DLC 11. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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