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Theory of Negation, SL III


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"Shaking my head like a dog...I stepped out of bed and walked towards my traveling pack that lay in the corner of the room.


"There was nothing that could erase that image from her head..."


This appears to transition suddenly from first person to third, and "her head" confuses things.

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