thezooqueen Posted October 28, 2012 Report Share Posted October 28, 2012 I have started a fanfic for Scheherazade If anyone wants to edit chapters for me as my grammar is very poor hehe I would love a volunteer. I hope you enjoy!! Seeking Thy Shadow Ch1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted October 28, 2012 Report Share Posted October 28, 2012 Awesome! I will circulate this among the writers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Leoshi Posted October 28, 2012 Report Share Posted October 28, 2012 Oh how we would wish for a Writer's Corner for Scheherazade. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted October 28, 2012 Report Share Posted October 28, 2012 Think we are going to have to set one up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted October 28, 2012 Author Report Share Posted October 28, 2012 Think we are going to have to set one up. Wow I forgot to turn on the watch. I thought no one liked it. I was getting ready to delete it... *blush* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
butterbiscuit88 Posted October 29, 2012 Report Share Posted October 29, 2012 Zoo: you give up too easily. It looks good so far; I have a fanfiction account too (gotta remember my login info...) so I can do some proofreading. Some grammar/typos, but in terms of actual constructive thing... I think reading it, the main thing for me was that even though the game is very heavy in dialogue, it makes up for that by having the emotions and chibis to exaggerate/illustrate certain moods. When just reading it as a story, I find myself having to make the mental images myself. A few descriptives, like 'Sadie smiles as she says "...."' or 'Anna blanches with a look of terror normally only provoked by her mother's horses' (going the gamut from simple to super-silly and long) would make it flow a bit better. I do want to see what happens next! Is this meant to be set after the events in game? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted October 29, 2012 Author Report Share Posted October 29, 2012 Zoo: you give up too easily. It looks good so far; I have a fanfiction account too (gotta remember my login info...) so I can do some proofreading. Some grammar/typos, but in terms of actual constructive thing... I think reading it, the main thing for me was that even though the game is very heavy in dialogue, it makes up for that by having the emotions and chibis to exaggerate/illustrate certain moods. When just reading it as a story, I find myself having to make the mental images myself. A few descriptives, like 'Sadie smiles as she says "...."' or 'Anna blanches with a look of terror normally only provoked by her mother's horses' (going the gamut from simple to super-silly and long) would make it flow a bit better. I do want to see what happens next! Is this meant to be set after the events in game? Thanks I will go back over the story and add more descriptives. Yes this is post game. Likely summer before school starts as she is still in Professor Nigels class. I am assuming Blake is not longer there. I was taking the assumption that. He was incharge of advanced courses. Therefore Nigle would likely be in charge of all classes till they find a replacement Professor. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 1, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2012 Hehe I have figured out what is going to happen here and where she will be going next Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 5, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 Here is the second chapter of this story. I hope you enjoy! Seeking Thy Shadow Ch2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 5, 2012 Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 Ah, Zul: ""I have caught a mouse." The voice whispered into her ear." Brilliant. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 5, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 hehe Glad you liked it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 5, 2012 Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 Yeah! Looks like they are going to be making a stop in Texas, too. Don't think the Woodlands are around in 1932, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 5, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 Yeah! Looks like they are going to be making a stop in Texas, too. Don't think the Woodlands are around in 1932, though. Hehe no but Houston and Galveston was there Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 5, 2012 Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 Actually, quite an exciting time to be in Texas, too, in 1932. Looking forward to the next chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 5, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2012 hehe in all reality they should be going to FLA LoL Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 6, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2012 I changed it to Florida. It is just too unreasonable the amount of travel time and island hopping from Texas to Puerto Rico. So they will take a train to Florida and then charter a plane to Puerto Rico Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 6, 2012 Report Share Posted November 6, 2012 That sounds more like the period, yeah, although she could probably charter a seaplane to take her Puerto Rico. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 6, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2012 That sounds more like the period, yeah, although she could probably charter a seaplane to take her Puerto Rico. From Texas? She would still have to island hop. Also given the time of year she would encounter [Redacted] *I should not give away any hints hehe* Just trust me she does not want to be in a plane or on a boat going from Texas to Puerto Rico. hehe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 6, 2012 Report Share Posted November 6, 2012 LOL! So true. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 6, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2012 LOL! So true. Besides I am more excited by what they will see in Puerto Rico. Something *Some place* I have not seen since I was a little child. Weee little child!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 7, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 7, 2012 Here is chapter 3. I hope you enjoy! Seeking Thy Shadow Ch3 I have already started ch4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 7, 2012 Report Share Posted November 7, 2012 Zul, embarrassed? Excellent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 7, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 7, 2012 Zul, embarrassed? Excellent. To be fair he is STILL human LoL. And remember it was only the briefest of seconds hehe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legate of Mineta Posted November 7, 2012 Report Share Posted November 7, 2012 Haha, no, it's a great moment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thezooqueen Posted November 7, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 7, 2012 I am glad you are enjoying it. I am rather enjoying writing it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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